tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.comments2014-01-11T17:22:29.412-05:00Words of the DrewciferAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/18106352374733393145noreply@blogger.comBlogger99125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-60954603538718510432011-12-28T22:01:47.768-05:002011-12-28T22:01:47.768-05:006 themes in 3 days nicely done.6 themes in 3 days nicely done.Markhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16739725587178203975noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-51395808186909428822011-09-04T08:44:22.534-04:002011-09-04T08:44:22.534-04:00It's so good to hear from you, Jennybean. Hone...It's so good to hear from you, Jennybean. Honestly, I'm surprised to find that anyone checks this blog anymore.<br /><br />The situation is that I'm a fucking idiot, but thank you for the very high praise about the lyrical styling.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18106352374733393145noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-41866064982497017882011-09-04T08:23:41.968-04:002011-09-04T08:23:41.968-04:00I like it, Drew. Reminds me a little of a Jack'...I like it, Drew. Reminds me a little of a Jack's Mannequin song, lyrically.<br /><br />I may not really know the situation... but I'm glad it's helping you heal.luckeyfroghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09338266098096236978noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-86574042831675734902010-04-20T22:27:01.909-04:002010-04-20T22:27:01.909-04:00This comment has been removed by a blog administrator.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-22572597202364396622010-04-16T18:00:51.135-04:002010-04-16T18:00:51.135-04:00This comment has been removed by a blog administrator.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-41306220780014982612010-04-11T14:16:49.552-04:002010-04-11T14:16:49.552-04:00This comment has been removed by a blog administrator.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-48589295595607271682009-03-14T21:10:00.000-04:002009-03-14T21:10:00.000-04:00Hey, sweetie, nifty story! Some parts are a little...Hey, sweetie, nifty story! Some parts are a little too.. halting is almost the word I would use, like the fluid nature of your prose hit some question and had to rebound a bit. Still, the premise is really enjoyable and I got chills at the end. ^^<BR/>How are yous? Mails me.<BR/><BR/>MeggersAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-73272960512041505242009-02-19T21:58:00.000-05:002009-02-19T21:58:00.000-05:00I like the powerful use of repetition, and never m...I like the powerful use of repetition, and never mind the begining. It really sets things up for the once upon a time repetition.The Alchemisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06603396621608902086noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-46836613275378246252009-02-19T21:57:00.000-05:002009-02-19T21:57:00.000-05:00I really like this. You might consider axing the b...I really like this. You might consider axing the begining, but I'm not sure. Actually, I really really like this.<BR/><BR/>Good work dude.The Alchemisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06603396621608902086noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-46975630070143784572009-02-16T19:57:00.000-05:002009-02-16T19:57:00.000-05:00I like this. It starts out kind of rambling, and t...I like this. It starts out kind of rambling, and then develops into a pretty sweet story. Almost makes me wonder if you might not be the lost boy, looking for someone to love him... But I doubt it. You're probably not that deep :DAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-728618124109112782008-11-10T08:08:00.000-05:002008-11-10T08:08:00.000-05:00Great work.Great work.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-5814897019022536892008-10-07T09:14:00.000-04:002008-10-07T09:14:00.000-04:00ok- this is just toooo good and so very timely to ...ok- this is just toooo good and so very timely to the Season!<BR/>Love your writing style.<BR/>Renee's mean old mammy-KimAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-76252569407499076142008-08-08T01:44:00.000-04:002008-08-08T01:44:00.000-04:00Thank you for the compliment, even if I'm not quit...Thank you for the compliment, even if I'm not quite sure what you meant. I always have difficulty actually writing the second chapter of a comedy.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18106352374733393145noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-59725632847806458462008-08-07T15:13:00.000-04:002008-08-07T15:13:00.000-04:00There is no denying that I thoroughly enjoyed this...There is no denying that I thoroughly enjoyed this. Some people use words to create irony. Your words are irony. Awesome. I look forward to more.Unknownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14905023403292514262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-75808812556801993672008-04-25T14:06:00.000-04:002008-04-25T14:06:00.000-04:00My favorite part was "My science and my art locked...My favorite part was "My science and my art locked in a brawl."luckeyfroghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09338266098096236978noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-46515596121963025642008-04-23T22:13:00.000-04:002008-04-23T22:13:00.000-04:00I apologize for the length, but here are my though...I apologize for the length, but here are my thoughts:<BR/><BR/>"Love you, Greg," he say as he fades from view. (Should be “says”)<BR/><BR/>Funny, he rarely said that when he was alive. (Maybe a separate sentence after “funny”? It seemed weird to me.)<BR/><BR/>Right. Sorry about that. I seem to have inherited my father's legendary ability to ramble ever since I hit my thirties. So where were we? Right, my potentially looming death.<BR/>(Maybe another word besides “right” again, although I like the casualness of an “Oh, right, my imminent death” kind of comment. Also, maybe change the sentence structure to something like “Ever since I hit my thirties, I seem to have inherited my father’s legendary ability to ramble.” Otherwise it’s uncertain what that first phrase refers to (your dad’s rambling ability started once you hit thirty?).)<BR/><BR/>The number of murders who would prefer not to be stopped by death is not a small number, let me tell you. (Did you mean to say “murders?” Maybe “murderers”?)<BR/><BR/>This is turning out to be a great day so far. (Seemed very random in context.)<BR/><BR/>The air in here is think and smells heavily of nicotine. (Thick, not think.)<BR/><BR/>You'd think two thirty-something, single psychics would have hooked up at some point, right? You'd be right, though that was a while ago. Back when we were still twenty-somethings. (I just liked this part.)<BR/><BR/>She's got the same apathetic edge to her voice as always. But her eyes tell me she's interested despite the act. (Seems like good description… I can imagine it, and also feel like I know the character better at the same time. It’s got a fragment in it, but you do that a fair amount, and I think it fits with your conversational writing style.)<BR/><BR/>While I'm in town I collect my unemployment check then head home to wait for Anne Marie's call. (Add a comma somewhere? It seems long to me.)<BR/><BR/>Is “staticky” a real word? If not, you could try “clouded/blurred with static.”<BR/><BR/>Anne Marie squeezes off two shots, the second one just barely missing my right foot. (It wasn’t immediately obvious to me she was shooting. Maybe start it with “Anne Marie aims the revolver” or something?)<BR/><BR/>I like the phrase “tragic improbabilities” and the sentence: “There's no static because there's only one path to be taken.”<BR/><BR/>I really did not expect her to freak out like she did (and I’m kinda confused by it), and didn’t expect him to walk away. It seemed like sort of an abrupt ending. When I think about it, his character probably believes in fate, in general. I’d think being able to see the future would remind you of the inevitability of certain moments, and I guess I’d think that might lead him to not get so upset over things like that… because they just had to happen, and they did. If that makes sense? Maybe I’m making wrong assumptions. Anyway, with that sort of thought about the character, it made sense- but not really before that. It seemed strange and didn’t seem to resolve much mystery. So maybe some sort of further explanation of why he has a hard time reacting with emotion would be good? Just a personal thought. See what others think. Maybe you were just trying to make me think, and you did, in which case I guess it’s good.luckeyfroghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09338266098096236978noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-72306001167866249232008-04-02T17:41:00.000-04:002008-04-02T17:41:00.000-04:00I told you already that I like this premise (for t...I told you already that I like this premise (for the book). It's a good idea.<BR/><BR/>I think you do a good job of breaking the fourth wall, so to speak, in your writing. I always feel awkward doing that, but you really seem to be able to pull it off and make it seem natural.luckeyfroghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09338266098096236978noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-47210546697395192682008-04-01T21:27:00.000-04:002008-04-01T21:27:00.000-04:00I thoroughly enjoyed this story. You sir, have a ...I thoroughly enjoyed this story. You sir, have a quite a talent bringing verisimilitude to your stories. <BR/><BR/>-BenjiUnknownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14905023403292514262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-8020693842988879872008-03-05T00:43:00.000-05:002008-03-05T00:43:00.000-05:00I am a fan of this poem as well. Upon my next ven...I am a fan of this poem as well. Upon my next venture to West Lafayette, I shall desire a signed copy.Unknownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14905023403292514262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-83130948950434446572008-02-16T23:04:00.000-05:002008-02-16T23:04:00.000-05:00"It has to fit into some kind of link,Like black f..."It has to fit into some kind of link,<BR/>Like black for fact or auburn for the Fall."<BR/>Nice.Renee Leyburnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13455519679065972832noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-79438345115972293802008-01-10T22:50:00.000-05:002008-01-10T22:50:00.000-05:00That was an entertaining little mental trip there ...That was an entertaining little mental trip there Peace. Thank you for that.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-88815953453155749182008-01-10T16:07:00.000-05:002008-01-10T16:07:00.000-05:00I liked your poem! Very eclectic, yet entertaining...I liked your poem! Very eclectic, yet entertaining. Keep up the good work.That Girl Jonniehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17698330279309658322noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-76315934563373532622008-01-08T09:06:00.000-05:002008-01-08T09:06:00.000-05:00You are so right- very awkard, I am so sorry, I ha...You are so right- very awkard, I am so sorry, I have not read you Solomon yet, but did print it out to take home for reading after scanning the 1st chapter. I use Renee's blog to jump to her friends blogs when I have a moment to spare here at the guilded law firm of Forrest $ Bourne, which may be how I mixed up your Solomon with (who's?)Noah. I am Sorry! <BR/>Kim (Future reader of all your works on Stephen and Solomon)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-2819939461020750092008-01-07T18:01:00.000-05:002008-01-07T18:01:00.000-05:00Ummmmmmmmmmm. This is going to be awkward. I don't...Ummmmmmmmmmm. This is going to be awkward. I don't have any characters named Noah. Beard/Eric does though. Are you thinking of him? If so I'm sure he would appreciate your praise and encouragement on his site which can be found in my sidebar.<BR/>Sincerely,<BR/>The DrewciferAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18106352374733393145noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35948127.post-86907431608482100732008-01-07T16:38:00.000-05:002008-01-07T16:38:00.000-05:00Wow just read all chapters posted to date. This i...Wow just read all chapters posted to date. This is great! Love Noah's personality! Please do not leave us with Noah on the cusp of greater things- write on sir!<BR/>Kim Silletto-Renee's mean old mammyAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com